FattyWhale's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Smoke - The City Menace]

K

^^Good Points^^
The movie displays a good moral, that smoking is bad, which I agree on. Anyway, I like how you had a lot going on in this movie aside from the main character, which was neat. Seems like a regular day when you do that. The animations were pretty cool, definitely the best part of this graphically.

^^Needs Improving^^
First thing I noticed was the short loop you had. It played the whole time which was annoying, and even worse, it was pretty low quality. Also, the storyline just seems to drag on too long. You need to get to the point much quicker. I'll admit I didn't watch the whole thing because I was pretty bored.

n00b-l0s3r responds:

Thank ye. Your criticism will be taken into much consideration. And I didn't know such simple animation would give this so much bonuses XD

It's OK if you didn't watch it all. At least you watched it :D

[Zomboy & Kadaver Trailer]

K

^^Good Points^^
This seems like it can be an interesting story. You show a character not like other superheroes, as he seems like a coward! Sounds like a funny series you are going to make. The drawings were good, nice coloring and decent animations too. I'll look for the first episode when it comes out.

^^Needs Improving^^
This is a little short for a trailer, I think. It's very short, especially for the filesize. You definitely need to learn how to compress audio, or you will never be allowed to upload a full episode without it.

Tetsubo responds:

Actually one side is a coward, there was to be a second personality a little more tailored to fighting monsters, unfortunately I found managing full episodes on a limited knowledge of Flash too much to realistically handle and have since moved on to other projects, however I had written 20 scripts and recorded all my character lines so maybe this can come to fruition in a different medium or with just a little outside help.

[A Love Story.]

K

^^Good Points^^
A cute movie, and a very lucky lady to have such a movie dedicated to them. You put your heart into this movie, which is really all that counts, but I must critique anyway. The music was great, went well with a love movie, and the character design was cute too.

^^Needs Improving^^
Really not a whole lot of animation in this movie. It's mostly just the text, which was good, but in animation, this had little.

RhysMus responds:

True,
A little more animation probably would have gone a long way, maybe to a better score. But who will ever know now.
Thanks!

[The BIG Fight!]

K

^^Good Points^^
One thing I noticed you did was try to put some expression on the face, which I found to add a tad bit of humor into this and made it more interesting.

^^Needs Improving^^
This really needs some work, I'm really surprised it even passed judgment. You use stick figures, and not the good kind with thick arms and great animations. You mainly just animated on large scale, and didn't animated arms and legs really at all, which is really primitive. You need to add some backgrounds to make things more interesting as well. This was a really empty movie.

El-Jameo responds:

i know madrick1 told me to make it longer which i did slitly plus this is my third animation

[The Walking Stickman ep.2]

K

^^Good Points^^
This was much better than the first episode in basically every way possible. You improved on your already smooth and life-like animations. I found these to be superior. The storyline was also much better. A little bit unexpected and pretty funny too. Again, great backgrounds too, they look really cool in this movie.

^^Needs Improving^^
I think you could have become a little more creative with the box opening tries. I was a little bored by all of the basic guns/explosions that every such movie uses.

chinkeeyong responds:

I -was- going to add a rampaging bull sequence and a termite sequence, but because of running time consistency with the first episode and the like, I left them out in favour of the sequences I thought NG users would be more comfortable with.
Looks like I was wrong. *sigh*

Thanks anyway!

[The Walking Stickman ep.1]

K

^^Good Points^^
Definitely a very colorful movie. I say that because of the backgrounds, which I thought were very cooly done. The animations looked very good, you obviously know what you are doing, and you got a little creative with this in the storyline.

^^Needs Improving^^
I think perhaps you were a little too obvious in displaying your animating skills. For example, in the beginning, the guy walks very slowly, which gives me the impression that you are just trying to show us your good walking animation rather than a movie.

chinkeeyong responds:

Eh... that was because in the beginning he walked too fast for you to catch up on what was going on, and I lengthened it. Unfortunately , it looks like I lengthened in a little TOO much, eh? :-)

[Hemlok & I]

K

^^Good Points^^
This was a funny, short little film. It's cool how you use people from NG as characters. The drawings looked humorous, and I liked the ending with a LOL, Internet scene. Great music too.

^^Needs Improving^^
I had to watch this movie twice. First time I watched it, I couldn't hear the audio at all. I thought there was none, so I had to replay just to make sure, but after turning up the volume I found that there was sound. Just watch that next time.

Review Request Club.

MetalDart responds:

MetalDart: I told people to turn up the volume. -_-

Hemlok: Thanks for the good review.

[Illusion of the Smiley's]

K

^^Good Points^^
A neat little movie you have here. I like how you made this movie, the animations are very smooth and the illusion, if you will, is very well animated and believable. The way you had it loop forever along with the music was a good idea too.

^^Needs Improving^^
I hate long introductions, and yours was pretty long. It was way too long for the length of this loop.

Popesture responds:

At the time the intro seemed cool though i do agree it is too long I shall work on this.

[Homeland]

K

^^Good Points^^
You don't have much of a singing voice, but hell, I have to give you credit for using your own song, which is something rare on NG. I liked the lyrics, very meaningful and interesting. You stayed with the lyrics in the animations and had some creative drawings.

^^Needs Improving^^
Just like your last movie, the graphics really hurt this. You don't have very good drawings, especially the people, and the fact that there is very little shading really makes this look unprofessional. Also, try to get a better quality in the audio.

Review Request Club

Timsplosion responds:

Glad you liked it. Yeh, with the audio, it's the equipment I use. (Let's just say it's not exactly proffessional equipment)Well, thx for the advice, and thx for the review.